1139 Members
25 Forums
2305 Topics
32773 Posts
Max Online: 420 @ 04/09/08 02:18 PM
|
|
|
#32832 - 02/07/08 01:35 AM
Re: Creative Writing Portfolio
[Re: Leon]
|
Ass Wind
addict
Registered: 10/06/06
Posts: 428
Loc: Modesto, CA.
|
Not to sound like a stick in the mud, well, partially to be a stick in the mud, but wouldn't the reviewing body check for plagiarism, and in posting excerpts here, you could be in risk of endangering your possible position, by having them up on the web, whether it was you who wrote it or not?
Anywho, I see a lot of angst in the monologue, which to be honest, is pretty easily done. You do, however, do it well, except towards the end. You're also short a couple commas in some places - between "sodding" and "bloody" (awesome use of the term, may I add) is one of them. Also,, too much use of the word "and."
The prose looks like fun, though.
Edited by Ass Wind (02/07/08 01:41 AM)
_________________________
|
|
Top
|
|
|
|
|
#32895 - 02/07/08 09:00 PM
Re: Creative Writing Portfolio
[Re: Ass Wind]
|
Lally
addict
Registered: 10/08/06
Posts: 616
|
Not to sound like a stick in the mud, well, partially to be a stick in the mud, but wouldn't the reviewing body check for plagiarism, and in posting excerpts here, you could be in risk of endangering your possible position, by having them up on the web, whether it was you who wrote it or not?
Anywho, I see a lot of angst in the monologue, which to be honest, is pretty easily done. You do, however, do it well, except towards the end. You're also short a couple commas in some places - between "sodding" and "bloody" (awesome use of the term, may I add) is one of them. Also,, too much use of the word "and."
The prose looks like fun, though.
Yer to be honest I agree but I cant edit it now :s
Can someone do it for me??
|
|
Top
|
|
|
|
Moderator: Gazzilla
|
|
