writing complete poems. I've got a couple of verses of seperate poems that I love but I can't complete.



The first one I started a while back, when I felt like I was hiding the reall way I felt from everyone, and no one knew.

Behind those smiling eyes
Lies another story
Of lonelines, upset and despair.
The curve of her lips
The twinkling laugh
Hides hope that someone might care.

She's a master of disguise
Living a life full of lies


AND thats it.



Then the second one, i have an amazing image in my head, but I can't quite get it all down in words the way i want to.

Cigarette smoke swirls through the cold morning air
The shadow of your lips
An embrace of my flesh
Cold coffee, love and despair.

Smooth varnished floor against my free naked feet
Words full of nothingness
Years full of lies
Glaring at your empty seat.


And there we have it, stuck again. Grrr.

Awh.

Everyone gets writers block at some point.

It'll go and you'll write them again.

WHOOP!

I hope so, cos seriously the picture in my head for the second ons is SO VIVID. I so rarely can picture things this well, I'm just annoyed it won't go onto the paper!

Keep trying, perhaps?

wow I really like your first poem,I'd say it's 'lovely' but,it doesn't seem to suit it.But so well writen,I like your poetry style.
When I get a writers block,I like to draw what I see in my mind becuase it's difficult to hold a vivid image and think of words to fit it [i do anyway.]So when you see it in front of you,the words might come to you from there.
maybe!
Or,sleep on it! think of it before you go to bed,and when you wake up you may be hit by all these...new ideas.
But don't give up! They're very good =]

Haha, thank youuu

I've written down so many words I want to put in it, and written the images in really unpoetic style, I just need to get them sounding good. And its soooo irritating! I used to get this all the time with drawings, but not normally with writing!
Grrr.

Thank you again!

Lawl.

I'll take her advice... for my own story writing. =/. I've not been able to write for effing ages now.

^^^ nosense! I'm sure you can write something excelent if you put your mind to it! =] I know what you mean though,the moods just got to be right.Otherwise it just gets frustrating.

And! It's quiet alrighty I enjoyed reading them very much!If you liked,you could post some of the phrases or words you want to put in it-we could all help you pull it together.
It could work!...and it might not also hehe.
But,I used to write a bit of poetry myself and sometimes other peoples improvisations can be a good thing *grin*

Haha, I don't mind people helping on poems when I've finished them, like tweaking them, but I don't really want people writing them, they wouldn't feel like mine then
Thanks for the offer though!

But it's be some mega-awesome fusion of minds and words, which could potentially take over the world.

I say do it.